A poem a wrote 5 years ago. I wonder what was going through my mind then?

love hurts

dreams are dangerous

tears stain

with nothing left to gain

she's no diamond

she shatters like glass

falling into the ocean

with an arrow through her heart

her soul rasing to Orion

a constellation amoug the stars

he told her that it was going to be okay

she went along

but it was too late

she sold her to the devil

now she is gone

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Comments (18)

  1. williamwatts

    I love this thanks for sharing

    May 27, 2016
    1. giirluncovered

      Thanks. I was 13 when i wrote this poem and i cant seemed to get what it suppose to mean

      May 27, 2016
      1. williamwatts

        It reads to me that this young girl had all the trust in the world for a love that she knew deep inside rather by herself or the two of them together would crash and burn. she was right all along.

        May 27, 2016
        1. giirluncovered

          It’s amazing what one can write just with emotions

          June 05, 2016
          1. williamwatts

            True emotions become talented works of Art. Ask anyone who writes for a living. their most prolific work was by far their most successful.

            June 05, 2016
  2. noahbody

    A beautiful write.

    May 27, 2016
    1. giirluncovered

      Thank you so much

      June 05, 2016
  3. rafaell

    i luv t , try to do it now and see the defrence, share it with us

    May 28, 2016
    1. giirluncovered

      Thanks and i’ll do that

      June 05, 2016
  4. nanaakuaadu-poku

    beautiful poem, but if I may ask, were you heart-broken at the time of writing? cos it comes with true emotions

    June 02, 2016
    1. giirluncovered

      I dont that, i was way to yound to have a broken heart. i guess i felt lost and scared at the time that my emotions just took over my pen

      June 05, 2016
      1. nanaakuaadu-poku

        ok, you are good girl. keep it up

        June 22, 2016
        1. giirluncovered

          Will do

          June 24, 2016
  5. write-on-it

    An emotive write. It really flowed nicely. Reflection can sometimes be a great way to express yourself and look at how far you have come. Sometimes the meaning of an emotional write doesn’t always have to have an answer, but more of a sense of feeling.

    June 04, 2016
    1. giirluncovered

      That makes so much sense. Thank you

      June 05, 2016
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    1. giirluncovered

      Thank you

      October 25, 2016